Thursday, December 11, 2014

Review for Finals

1. Timeliness - how recent the subject of the story is 
2. Proximity - how close the subject of the story is to the reader
3. Human Interest - a story about people, usually people going through hardships
4. Prominence - how important the story's subject is
5. Conflict - two clashing forces in a story
6. Interviews - when a journalist/reporter asks a person questions to get information and quotes for a story
7. Research - looking things up to find background information on the story
8. Quotations - using something someone said directly in a story and attributing it to them
9. Yes-no question - a question in an interview that can be answered with only a "yes" or "no
10. Follow-up question - a question that "follows up" a previous one to get more information
11. Objective writing - writing without bias
12. Transition paragraph - a paragraph that transitions between two quotes
13. Hard news story - a story that's "just the facts"
14. Soft news story - more entertaining than hard news
15. Inverted Pyramid - the most important structure of a hard news story—lede at top, nut graf, then information from most to least important
16. Third-person point of view - using "she" "he" "they" instead of "I" "we" etc.
17. 5 Ws and H lead - who, what, when, where, why, how
18. editing - going back through a first draft and making changes
19. attribution - to attribute a quote to someone
20. paraphrase - to summarize something
21. fragmentary quotation - small pieces of a quote that goes into a paraphrasing 
22. direct quotation - the exact quote from the source
23. partial quotation - a rephrased or edited quote
24. Uses of quotations - to get some of the "real world" in your story, to prove a point, to add different points of view
25. When to use quotations - in any story unless it's an opinion or editorial piece
26. When quotations are unnecessary or not desired - see above
27. Editorial - an opinion piece from the editor or publisher themselves 
28. editorial page - a page reserved for the above
29. columns - long but thin areas for a story, usually opinions or advice 
30. editorial that criticizes  - an editorial that gives a negative opinion about something 
31. editorial that explains - an editorial that explains a topic or their opinion
32. editorial that persuades - an editorial that persuade the reader to share their opinion
33. letter to the editor

Tuesday, December 9, 2014

Feature Story

It’s not uncommon to hear Doug Craig make wry, offhand remarks about his disability, or to see him zipping around Jersey City on his mobility scooter with his dog, a Bernese Mountain mix named Gracie, in tow. Despite his sense of humor about it, he suffers from a disease that has been slowly debilitating him through his life, making simple things, like raising his arms above his head, impossible.

Facioscapulohumeral Muscular Dystrophy occurs in about 12 in 100,000 births. Someone diagnosed with it will slowly lose muscle strength in their face, upper arms, and abdomen, though it also can impede one’s ability to even walk. Many, like Craig, were diagnosed in their teens, meaning that they would live with this illness hanging over their head as they aged. 

“If you were to ask actually what a muscular dystrophy is—they’re diseases that involve the progressive loss of skeletal muscle strength because of the progressive dying-off of skeletal muscle cells,” Craig said.

Though it’s the most common manifestation of muscular dystrophy, it has minimal amounts of research and funding devoted to it, unlike many other genetic diseases.

Craig has a plan to change this. 

For several years, he has supported the FSH (Facioscapulohumeral) Society, a group that funds research for his type of muscular dystrophy. 

“Although I’ve been a supporter of them,” Craig said, “that mostly meant I’ve just made contributions to them, I’ve never done anything to actively raise money, so I thought it was about time I’d do that.”

Craig will do this by simply making a coast-to-coast journey from Manhattan to Seattle on his mobility scooter with Gracie in tow. 

“I came up with this plan to go across the country to raise money because I thought that it’s a difficult sort of thing to do and it might attract enough attention,” Craig said. “There are two purposes to the trip, one to raise money and another to raise awareness. And I think that as awareness increases the donations will increase as well, and fundraising, per se, is gonna be based on social media engagement and conventional media engagement.”

This might seem like a lofty goal, especially for a man who has to get around using a scooter at all times, but after talking with Craig about his plans, it’s clear that he’s put a good deal of thought into his plan. 

“The idea will be that we average about 25 miles a day where I can and stop at different hotels along the way,” Craig said. “There are still a lot of details to work out between now and April, but I wanted to not wait until everything was solved before I started to publicize it, because that would be valuable time lost.” 

Craig has started a website for the project at dougngracie.com, and has made accounts on several social media platforms with the same handle to prepare for the live-blogging, tweeting, and Instagramming of his journey.

Craig even sent a letter to the company who makes his trusty mobility scooter, Pride Mobility, asking them to sponsor his project. He also asked them to donate to the FSH Society and for the input of some of their engineers on the best way to construct a side-car for Gracie when she’s not running alongside him. 

“I said in exchange we would be happy to advertise on the website and if they wanted to have media events along the way we’d be happy to participate in those as long as they didn’t obscure the main objective,” Craig said. 

Craig has recently received word from Pride Mobility that they would be happy to sponsor his trip, as well as provide him with a different scooter model that would be more suited to the rigors of the journey. 

While Craig's trip is relatively unknown at the moment, he has plans to seek out interviews with news outlets across all types of media. The goal is to rouse enough interest to get his trip funded as well as to donate as much money as possible from donors from individuals, organizations, or companies to the FSH Society and the research programs that they fund. 

“The hope is that the novelty of it will raise interest for some,” Craig said, “and for dog lovers the interest will be in hearing about Gracie’s exploits across the country. I’ll also drive interest towards the website where people can go donate money to support the trip and read the blog posts.” 

Already, Craig has been gaining support on Facebook, and more and more people are hearing about his trip as his friends share his posts about it to their friends. 

“I’m happy to support Doug’s project,” Craig's college friend, Rob Dye said.  “He’s been a good buddy of mine for a long time, and he definitely has the sorta conviction that someone needs to go through with something like this.” 

Craig has been planning his route through Google Maps by using guides created by long-distance cyclists, and he plans to kick off the three-to-four-month journey sometime in mid-April. 

“I’d like to have it launched either at Good Morning America or the Today Show. If I can arrange that,” Craig said. “It sounds like the sort of thing that they might be able to get behind if it looked like something that was well-planned and like it was going to actually happen. So if I could demonstrate that I could go out to Pride [Mobility] and that might demonstrate to them that I’m serious.”

While to many it seems like a pretty idealistic idea, Craig's friends and family are all on board.

“It’s great to see Doug getting out there and doing something that’ll ultimately help people who share his disability,” family member Steve Allison said. “I really admire him for doing something that, you know, so many people would say ‘Wow, there’s no way this guy’s gonna do this.’”

While Craig sometimes has his doubts about whether he will be able to ultimately achieve this, he said that the more he talks about it to people and the more progress he makes on his sponsorships and plans, the more confident he becomes. 

“I think part of the commitment is discussing it and telling people you’re going to do it, because the more you do that the more you feel committed and the worse you feel about backing out,” Craig said.

In the most ideal circumstances, Craig said that he would like to have something that could raise awareness for FSHD in the way that this summer's phenomenal Ice Bucket Challenge raised awareness for ALS, increasing donations to research exponentially. 

“I think that that was an anomaly and it’s hard to predict the way in which somebody will achieve that next time. I don’t think I could predict it,” Craig said. “And it’s not about elevating it to a position of more-prominence, or more-importance than some other disease,  it’s about making sure it’s included on the list of those things we care about solving.”

“Aside from the doing it for the business purpose of raising money,” Craig said, “it’s gonna be a great adventure to see the whole US coast-to-coast, not going through 80 miles an hour on the highway, but going at 8 miles on a scooter through the countryside and talking with and meeting people along the way, taking photographs and video along the way… It’ll just be a wonderful adventure.”

Wednesday, December 3, 2014

Current Events Quiz 12/3/14

1. What did downtown shooter Larry Steven McQuillians have written on his chest when he was killed? Page A1 "'Hate' drives gunman…"
"Let me die."

2. Why did Bill Cosby step down from his Temple University board position? page A2 "Cosby resigns…."

Because of sexual assault allegations.

3. How much did Cyber Monday sales increase this year? Page B7 "Cyber Monday shoppers…"

8.7 percent.

4. What is Alyssa Kuykenall's favorite animal? Page C5 "Faces off the field"

Elephants.

5. Of the 24 movies listed here, what is your favorite? Page D1 "24 ways to stay home…"

A Christmas Story.

Short Answer:

Read the entire story about Larry McQuillians shooting rampage downtown on Page A1 - "Hate drives gunman..."

1. Does this kind of situation make you nervous? Why?

2. If he had survived, what kind of punishment should he have had?

3. What should society be doing to help stop this kind of activity?

4. Do people have the right to believe as they want, but as long as they don't act on it, it is okay?

5. Should the state and federal government be involved in trying to keep this kind of thing from happening again?

5A. If you said yes to question 5 - what do you think some of the problems might be if they are involved?

5B. If you said no to question 5 - why do you think they shouldn't be involved and who should be in control of trying to stop these kinds of activities?


Yes, it does make me nervous because these kind of attacks are often random and near-impossible to stop beforehand, which makes them even more dangerous. If he had survived, I think he certainly should have been imprisoned but also given help in terms of his mental illness. 
Technically, people do have the right to believe what they want. They can't really be stopped from doing so. However, I think that the societal structures that create people with beliefs like McQuillians' need to be examined and deconstructed. 
The federal government getting involved could be a slippery slope. I think that groups that can be classified as hate groups, like the sect that the shooter apparently belonged to, should be at least watched by the feds, because they can easily create situations like this. However, I feel like the federal government could easily end up policing things like religion and such, and not the kind of dangerous sects that McQuillians belonged to either—giving them permission to watch people because of their religious affiliations could easily become an outlet for the racial profiling of Muslims due to the post-9/11 hostility directed at them.

Tuesday, December 2, 2014

Feature Story Notes

NOTE: these are the notes I took while doing the interview, which was almost 30 minutes long making it incredibly time-consuming to transcribe, though I marked the time at important parts. 


An idea to come w/something to raise money for research on this type of muscular dystrophy (FSHD) facioscapulohumeral muscular dystrophy 

Diagnosed w it at age of 14 - one of 9 different types of muscular dystrophy 
MDs are diseases that involve progressive loss of skeletal muscle strength bc of the progessive dying-off of skeletal muscle cells
FSHD is the most prevalent type of MD (not by a lot) 12 out of 100,000
“It’s not a disease that very many do research on and there’s not a lot of money allocated for research on this disease.”
Been a supporter of a group that raises $$ for this (FSH Society) https://www.fshsociety.org/
Has mostly just made contributions, not actively raised money, thought it was time to do something active

How will your trip raise money for it? ( 7 mins)
“That’s something I’m still working on.”
Thought that it’s something that’ll draw attention thru social media, etc—will raise money as well as raise awareness, which will lead to money
Engagement w social and conventional media—interviews on television & radio when he goes thru towns that already have research going on, how he chose major destinations 
Novelty will raise awareness, dog lovers will want to hear about gracies exploits (9:42)

How are you preparing? (10 mins)
Preparing for logistics: stamina, 25 miles a day, stop at different hotels; still many details to work out between now and april (when the trip starts!!) 
Some things to figure out: 
finding lithium batteries that have the capacity to (12:00) get scooter as far as necessary each day, 
how will gracie travel?
Either design an appropriate side car that can be folded away, or her traveling in a trailer pulled behind him 
Looking for corporate sponsorship by Pride Mobility, company that makes the scooter, offered to make a trip to Exeter, Pennsylvania, where they are located; asked them to make a donation to FSH Society, provide a scooter for the trip, provide spare parts and service, (15:00), have their engineers work w him in designing a side car for Gracie—in exchange he would be happy to advertise for them on the website, have media events as he goes along on the trip as long as they don’t obscure the main objective
Places where tthere are few and far between hotels there will have to be a support vehicle w volunteers
Plan to blog about it, shoot video, post on social media

Where are you going to start the trip? (18:00)
Ideally launched on Good Morning America or the Today Show in Manhattan
Route itself: (19:00)
Identified cities that have research groups in them, would like radio & television interviews joined by someone from the lab
Assembled from a combination of google maps, route called east coast greenway http://www.greenway.org/, trans america cycling route http://www.transamtrail.com/
Planning on ending in seattle, on west coast & has major research for FSHD

What are your ultimate goals for the project (22 mins)
  “Not about elevating it to a position of more prominence or more importance than some other disease, it’s about making sure it’s included on the list of things that we care about solving. In many ways I would say that FSHD isn’t the worst disease in the world.” (23:00)
“Monetarily I’d like to raise a million dollars for research.” Ideally like to have something as big as the icebucket challenge (24:00)
All money will go directly to the FSH Society, also will do fundraiser beforehand to support the cost of the trip, (15-20k)
It will take between three and four months—try to leave somewhere in mid-April, still cool enough for Gracie (26:00)

(27:00) How sure are you that this will happen?
Part of the commitment is discussing it w people which makes it harder for you to back out


It’ll be a great adventure—not going 80mph on the highway, but 6 mph on a scooter, talking with and mtg people along the way, taking photographs and video along the way (28:00)!!!

Monday, November 24, 2014

Current Events Quiz 11/24/14

1. Why did Bowie student Jack Guy design Grade Buzz? Page A1 "Student launches..." Did you know this was in our school newspaper 2 weeks ago!!!!
The AISD Cloud site's user interface wasn't very effective.

2. After the huge snowstorms hit Buffalo, NY last week, what is the next major concern for the region? Page A5 "Winter Weather"

Flooding because of snow melt.

3. What point is cartoonist, Chan Lowe, trying to make in the political cartoon on page A11?

That all of the different "holidays" that feature extreme sales on products are just going to cause consumers to buy more and more, which will cost them more than if they had just bought what they needed at its normal price.

4. Why is Alexis Alpha suing the San Marcos police department? Page B1 "Woman sues police…"

Because she was assaulted by a police officer, the attack resulting in a concussion and broken teeth.

5. Why are theme parks struggling to attract new visitors? Page B7 "Changing theme of parks"

Because people have so many entertainment outlets in the comfort of their own home, it's becoming harder and harder for them to be convinced to make the trip to an amusement park.

Short Answer: What impact does Capitol Metro's decision to raise fares by $.50 in January potentially have on the people of Austin?

Think logically here and think outside the box. Who does this impact the most and what will happen to their lives?
While the increased fares may help fund things in the city, they will impact many people negatively. Specifically homeless people, for which the bus is a main mode of transportation. 50 cents can make a big difference for someone who has to scrape together coins earned on the side of the road just to eat, much less to get from one place to another in a way other than walking. Some homeless people even use the bus as a place to sleep, for lack of any other safe, warm place to shut their eyes. The raised fares will definitely impact their lives negatively, and leave some of them exposed to the elements as winter sets in.

Thursday, November 20, 2014

Feature Story Example

1. When you read the headline, were you at all interested in the story?
Somewhat; I think if it had just been a headline about WWII veterans it wouldn't have been as interesting, but the quote draws a reader in more. 

2. After you completed the story, what were two things you learned about that you did not know before

I never really realized how quickly the WWII generation is "slipping away from us". Also, I didn't know that 6,000 Americans died on Iwo Jima.

3. Was the story better than you expected after reading the headline?

Yes. Even though the quote made it better, this isn't the kind of story that I usually read.

4. What person was the story written in?

First.

5. Did the chronological format help the story in your opinion?

Yes, it was easier to follow. 

6. How many different people did the writer quote in the story?

13.

7. What was the thematic element the writer used throughout the story?

The thief of time.

8. How did the quotes help the story?

They made the story more personal, more intimate. 
9. Was the story written in a very strict, quote-transition format?

No.

10. How is this story different than the hard news pieces we have written in the past?

It has more pathos in it and it's less about the hard facts and more about the people.

Current Events Quiz 11/20/14

1. Why would the city spend money to develop two PGA-level golf courses in East Austin? Page A1 "Austin council considers…"
It's a vision that's been in the works for four decades and it would help fund work in the city and share income.

2. What is the % of 1st time gun buyers purchasing weapons at Metro Shooting Supplies in Ferguson, MO? Page A2 "Gun sales surge…"

60%

3. How many feet of snow fell in Buffalo, NY in a 24 hour period yesterday? Page A3 "7 dead in Buffalo…"

5 1/2 feet of snow. 

4. Why were 2 Austin Police Department officers suspended yesterday? Page B1 "2 officers suspended…"

They were caught on tape making jokes about rape.

5. What has helped Target stores report an increase of 3.2% on profits? BE SPECIFIC Page B5 "Target rebounds…"

Beauty products, toys, and back-to-school items.

6. Who are the current projected teams who will play in the 1st ever NCAA football play-offs? Page C3 "Power Four plus more" List the 4 teams projected by both the National Staff Writers and the other team selected by the Austin American Statesman for a total of 5 teams.

Alabama, Oregon, Florida State, Baylor, Mississippi State. 

7. What are three of the best items you can build to improve your outdoor space to make it more livable? Page SA3 "Move your lifestyle…"

Outdoor kitchens, outdoor fireplaces, and fire pits.

8. Why is Players burger joint closing" Page D1 "Customers reminisce about…"

To become a building that houses a school for business.

9. Which of the 5 items in the Long Weekend Five Things to Do would you like to go to? Page D2

The performance of Hamlet. 

10. Do you ever read your horoscope? Go to page D5 and read yours and respond to the predictions.

Oh wow, my horoscope (Sagittarius) definitely has some advice that I really need to take to heart. I don't read serious horoscopes very often, but I think they can be interesting and have good advice even if you don't believe in astrology.

Tuesday, November 18, 2014

Feature Story Brainstorm


1. Who is your main subject?
Our family friend Doug Craig.

2. Supporting interviews (who else do you need to talk to)?
Wife Elizabeth, stepdaughter Ava. 

3. What is the topic or potential topic?
His upcoming cross-country trip on his mobility scooter to raise money and awareness for muscular dystrophy, which he has.

4. Which angle from above will you write the story?
Human Interest

5. Then to help you get going faster, come up with 20 questions that you can ask your main subject. Type these in your blog.
1. When were you diagnosed with muscular dystrophy? 
2. How does it affect your life on a daily basis?
3. How does it affect your family's life?
4. How has your disability changed the way you perceive the world?
5. How has your disability changed your outlook on life?
6. What made you come up with idea for your cross-country trip?
7. When will you start the trip?
8. How are you raising money for the trip?
9. How will this trip help raise awareness for muscular dystrophy? 
10. How will your mobility scooter hold up for the long trip?
11. Are you going to be staying in hotels or with friends/acquaintances? 
12. What sort of obstacles are you facing as you prepare for the trip?
13. What sort of obstacles will you face during the trip?
14. Where will you start your trip?
15. Where will you end your trip?
16. How long will the trip take?
17. Will the trip help raise money for muscular dystrophy?
18. If so, is the money being donated to research or to people with it?
19. Are you going to try to get more visibility about your trip?
20. If so, how? The media? 
6. Once you complete that portion, you need to come up with 5-10 questions you need to ask your supporting interviews. Type these into your blog. You may need different questions for each supporting subject.
1. Are there any concerns you have about Doug's trip?
2. Will you be going on the trip?
3. Or will you meet him at certain points? 
4. How has Doug's disability affected you?
5. What affects have you seen it have on his attitude or personality?
7. You will need to do a little research on the topic you expect to interview your main subject about. Take a little time and do some google searching - find at least 5 new things about the intended topic you should know before you interview your main subject. List those on your blog.
Before I interview I will need to know
  • What exactly muscular dystrophy is
  • What it does to a person's body
  • What sort of research is being done for it
  • How long it takes to become actually noticeable/visible
  • How it affects a person's general health

8. Write when you plan to conduct the interview(s)?
Thanksgiving break while we're staying with Doug & Elizabeth. 

9. Where you will interview them (some interviews are better to do in the persons environment, while others should be done in public places, ALL interviews should be done in person)?
At their apartment in Jersey City.

10. How will you record the information? (taking notes is ideal, and if you want to record the conversation you MUST get permission. You can do both if they will allow you to record, this is a really strong technique that you could use.)
I will take notes and record the conversation.

Key Ingredients

1. LIST 3 DETAILS THAT YOU FOUND ABOVE THAT HELP THE STORY
The client's name (and position), the description of the woman, and the 
2. THERE ARE DETAILS THAT YOU MIGHT NOT INCLUDE IN A REGULAR NEWS STORY, PLEASE LIST AT LEAST 2 OF THEM

The prostitutes name, what the governor paid for. 
3. DO YOU WANT TO KEEP READING?

Yes.
4. LIST 3 DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS THAT YOU FOUND ABOVE THAT HELP THE STORY
The state of the room the little girl was found in, her age, and the horrific condition she was found in. 
5. THERE ARE DETAILS THAT YOU MIGHT NOT INCLUDE IN A REGULAR NEWS STORY, PLEASE LIST AT LEAST 2 OF THEM
The graphic details of her condition and what she was wearing.
6. WHAT CONDITIONS EXIST REGARDING THIS CHILD THAT THE AUTHOR DESCRIBES TO YOU?
She is emaciated, bug-bitten, and unwashed. 

7. DO YOU WANT TO KEEP READING?
Yes.
8. HOW DOES THE QUOTE HELP THE TRANSITION STATEMENT ABOVE IT?
It supports it with details as well as emotion.
9. DO YOU WANT TO KEEP READING?
Yes.
10. LIST 3 DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS THAT YOU FOUND ABOVE THAT HELP THE STORY
The sparks, the ranch hands trying to fix the water pipe, the temperature.
11. THERE ARE DETAILS THAT YOU MIGHT NOT INCLUDE IN A REGULAR NEWS STORY, PLEASE LIST AT LEAST 2 OF THEM
The description of the sparks from the metal grinder and the ranch hands fixing the pipe. 
12. WHAT WAS THE ANECDOTE THAT THE AUTHOR USED IN THIS STORY?
The ranch hands fixing the pipe near Lake Zaca. 
13. WHAT WAS THE IRONICAL PART OF THIS STORY IN REGARDS TO HOW THE FIRE STARTED?
The sparks originated from something being used to fix a water pipe.
14. DO YOU WANT TO KEEP READING?
Somewhat.
15. LIST 3 PIECES OF BACKGROUND INFORMATION FOUND IN THESE 3 PARAGRAPHS
Last year the Forest Service spent over 1 billion dollars on wildfire damage, Congress is considering a new federal account to cover wildfires, and California's wildfire spending has risen 150%. 
16. WHICH ONE DO YOU THINK IS THE MOST CRUCIAL?
The amount of money the Forest Service spent on wildfires last year.
17. DO YOU WANT TO KEEP READING?
Somewhat.

Friday, November 14, 2014

Current Events Quiz 11/14/14

1. How many undocumented immigrants could be impacted by proposed immigration changes? Page A1 "Obama immigration overhaul.."
5 million. 

2. Why will the Philae lander potentially stop working in a couple of days after its historic landing on a comet? Page A3 "Cliff on comet's surface…"

A cliff is blocking the sun from the solar panels. 

3. How many homeless people were provided shelter from the cold last night through city services? How many men were at ARCH? Page B1 "Shelters opening doors…"

About 330 people were given shelter, and 184 men were at ARCH.

4. Who were the American and National Leage MVP's in Major League Baseball? Page C5

Clayton Kershaw and Mike Trout. 

5. How can you limit ad tracking on your iPhone? Page SA4 "What Atlas, Facebook's ad…"

Limit your "liking" on Facebook, as well as your ad-tracking by editing the settings on your devices. 

Short Answer: Read the article on Page A1 "Cruz's net neutrality views irk techies".
Net neutrality is the concept that Internet providers should treat all Internet content equally in terms of the speed it travels to consumers, so that small business owners and entrepreneurs can have the same  chance as the big corporations. 
I don't think that the government should be involved in regulations like this because while the initial idea appears to be a good idea, it seems like a slippery slope to me in terms of the control they have over what people can access on the Internet; but that's not to say that I don't think the government shouldn't be regulating sites that are potentially dangerous or illegal, but that's a different story all together.
Cruz thinks that net neutrality is necessary to make sure that big corporations aren't getting the upper hand over small businesses, but techies think that the government shouldn't be regulating the speed at which the Internet operates, and that the original purpose of net neutrality won't be fulfilled even if it is implemented. 

Wednesday, November 12, 2014

Lone Star Dispatch #2

Front Page
Safe Place offers protection for all abused students
Summary: Austin ISD is collaborating with Safe Place, an counseling organization for troubled teens. Any students who have suffered any kind of abuse, are struggling with addiction, or are parenting can speak with one of the Safe Place counselors, who will help them through the hard times and get them the help they need. 
Who? Safe Place organization, AISD, Bowie counselors, Bowie students
What? a counseling program for students going through rough times
Where? AISD/Bowie
When? this year
Why? to get students the help they need
How? with counselors and support groups
Who was quoted in the story? Kate Kopke, Nathaniel Morgan
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "Young adolescents should seek help from a responsible adult if they are facing any abuse. They shouldn't be ashamed or embarrassed about it." - Nathaniel Morgan
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Yes. 
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? A quote. 

Student Life
Traditions that bring families together on Black Friday
Summary: Every Black Friday millions of Americans brave the packed stores for the discounts. Many people wake up before dawn to prepare for a day of shopping and saving. Students and teachers at Bowie have different opinions about Black Friday.
Who? Bowie students and teachers, Americans in general
What? Black Friday shopping
Where? stores across America
When? The Friday after every Thanksgiving Thursday
Why? For the sales
How? By waking up early and drinking lots of coffee
Who was quoted in the story? Chelsea Hummer, Irene Hidalgo, Vicki Hebert
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "I love going Black Friday shopping. I wake up really early around 3 a.am. and drink a lot of coffee to stay energized and awake throughout the whole day." - Chelsea Hummer
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Somewhat.
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? A statement
Rewritten Lede
Every year on the Friday after Thanksgiving, millions of Americans wake up before the crack of dawn, braving the swarming masses of consumers just like them to get the best deals before Christmas.

News
Halloween games brings on 'spooky' cheers
Summary: This Halloween Bowie football played Lake Travis for the district championship. There was a huge turnout, despite it being on such a popular holiday—or maybe because it was on such a popular holiday. Even though the Dawgs lost 64-7 students and players alike were left with unforgettable memories.
Who? Bowie football players and students
What? the Bowie-Lake Travis football game on Halloween
Where? the football stadium
When? Halloween
Why? For the district championship
How? students supported the team with 'spooky' cheers on Halloween
Who was quoted in the story? Leland huffman, Ian Good, Cody Pedneau
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "I thought it was really fun playing the district championship on Halloween. I wish we could've won that game but overall it was a good Halloween." - Leland Huffman
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Yes.
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? a statement
(I just realized this was a photo essay that was right next to the News section. I hope that that's okay.)

Sports
Swim team paddles to reach goals
Summary: The Bowie swim team has to get up at 6 every morning to make their daily practice before school. They have to push themselves hard in the water as well as on the ground when they do dry-land core and leg workouts. It's hard work, but the swimmers love it. 
Who? Bowie swimmers
What? Bowie swim team
Where? Bowie, Circle C Pool
When? Every morning
Why? To practice
How? They have to get up extremely early to get to practice on time
Who was quoted in the story? Zachary Mikkelson, Douglas Smith, Sheldon Wall, Brooke Wheelis, Ashlyn Raley, Kayce Stevens
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "Even though swimming isn't a team sport, because it's individual races, I like the community and team it builds." - Kayce Stevens
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Somewhat
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? A quote

Entertainment
Children's plays on track to tour
Summary: The STC's senior-directed plays are set to tour to several different elementary schools. The senior directors have worked hard to hone their leadership skills even before the school year started. Many of them were in children's shows as a freshman, and they have been striving to be senior directors ever since. 
Who? STC, senior directors
What? The STC's children's shows
Where? Bowie, several elementary schools around the city
When? this week
Why? to give elementary students a chance to be exposed to theatre
How? by rehearsing every day 
Who was quoted in the story? Betsy Cornwell, Halen Wilson, Ariel Abudu
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "Anyone who is scared of joining theatre, I encourage them to." - Ariel Abudu
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Yes. 
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? A quote

Commentary
We 'throw like girls', and think like human beings
Summary: Michelle, the writer of the commentary, defines feminism and gives the example of Bowie's "shorts revolt" as a sort of feminist demonstration. She gives facts about the unequal treatment, representation, and pay that women get in America and calls for a change. 
Who? Women across America and the world
What? the feminist movement
Where? America, the world
When? from 1910 to the present
Why? for equality for all women
How? different kinds of demonstrations, videos, articles, protests, etc
Who was quoted in the story? no one
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? N/A
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? yes
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? a statement

In-Depth
The debate on student loans
Summary: Bowie seniors are already facing the looming issue of student debt. College tuition is constantly rising, and even with scholarships many students have to take out student loans to be able to attend their college. This will leave them in debt for years. 
Who? Bowie seniors
What? their growing debt 
Where? Bowie
When? now
Why? college tuition is far too expensive for most students to pay without student loans
How? not fully paying tuition money because of various reasons
Who was quoted in the story? Alex Koke, Spencer Cobb, Tyler Young, Lindsay Worthington
What quote was the strongest in your opinion? "A solution to student debt would be avoiding taking out a lot of loans and getting as many scholarships as possible." - Alex Koke
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading? Somewhat
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement? a statement

Wednesday, November 5, 2014

Feature Writing Preview

1. What is the difference between a hard news lead (lede) and the one you read above?
It doesn't give a brief summary of all of the information given in the article like it would in a hard news lead, instead it draws the reader in. 

2. What paragraph(s) did you learn the following information?
a. Who

Ted Williams
b. What

His voice
c. Where

Hudson Street northbound off I-71
d. When

January of 2011
e. Why

He's on the streets because of bad decisions he made. 
f. How

He's using his vocal talent to get himself off the street. 

3. Are there quotes in this story?

Yes.

4. Are those quotes arranged in the "quote-transiton" style we used in news writing?

No. 

5. Who is quoted in the story?

Ted Williams, Kevin McLoughlin, Doral Chenoweth III, Ken Andrews, Tony Florentino, Shane Cormier, Frank Wilson, and Patrick Harris.

6. What quote is the most powerful in the story, in your opinion?

"My boss said to me, 'If you don't get him hired, you're fired.'" 

7. How many paragraphs is the story?

33

8. How many words is the story (hint: you can copy and paste into Word and get a word count)?

762.

9. What is significant about the lead (lede) and the final paragraph of the story?

The lede ,"That voice." and the final paragraph, "That voice could be his." are significant because they tie into each other, almost as if the first one is a question and the last one is an answer. "That voice you hear? This guy could be that voice." 

10. Why do you think the writer did that with the lead (lede) and final paragraph?

It adds interest to the story, making the writing more interesting to read than that of hard news, which you only read to get information about events.

11. Was the story interesting to read?

Yes. 

12. When you finished the story, but BEFORE you watched the video, did you want to hear the voice?

Yes. 

13. Multimedia approaches are powerful tools, what impact did the video have when watched directly after reading the story?

It gave you an image and a sound to what was described in the story—the video made you connect what his voice actually sounds like to people's reactions towards it. 

14. Would the story have lost its impact without the video?

Yes. 

15. Did the writer try to come up with a way for you to hear the voice, i.e. did he try to describe the voice or give you a way to "hear" the voice without really hearing it?

Yes. 

16. How did the writer do that?

The writer uses the words "radiant pipes" and uses the phrases he says in the voice in the writing to bring to mind the voice-over voices, which allows you to "hear" what his voice must sound like.