Thursday, January 8, 2015

Lone Star Dispatch #3

News
Penalties for off campus lunches

Bowie staff have finally realized how many underclassmen are managing to get off-campus against the rules with seniors as their accomplices. They are starting to crack down on this to keep students safe, and there are many penalties for the offenders.

Who was quoted in the story?
Hallie Arnold, Vicento Trevino
What quote was the strongest in your opinion?
"You never know what could happen while on your way to a fast food restaurant." 
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading?
No.
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement?
A statement.

Rewritten Lead
For many underclassmen, leaving campus illegally with a senior is thrilling both for simply getting away with breaking school rules as well as the reward of deliciously greasy fast food for lunch at the end. However, Bowie staff is starting to crack down on the rule-breakers.

Commentary
Hola, I still don't know Spanish

The author argues that the foreign language program at Bowie doesn't teach language effectively or efficiently. She says that there should be less projects and book work and more hands-on learning and vocabulary assignments. 

Who was quoted in the story?
N/A
What quote was the strongest in your opinion?
N/A
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading?
Somewhat.
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement?
A statement.

Student Life
The winter keeps students warm and in style

Melissa Pittman and Nathan Olson give tips on winter style. They say to layer up to keep warm, but also utilize socks, sweaters, and scarves to stay fashionable even in the bitter cold. 

Who was quoted in the story?
Melissa Pittman, Nathan Olson
What quote was the strongest in your opinion?
"This may not make sense at first, but the most important necessity for dressing up in the winter is being warm." 
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading?
Yes. 
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement?
A statement.

Entertainment
The holiday season brings out family traditions around ATX

Most people spend their holidays with their family and get to see members who they only talk to a few times a year. Families have different traditions and beliefs, Christmas and Hannukah are two examples given in the article, but it's a special time for everyone.

Who was quoted in the story?
Bryn Williams, Sydney Cowell, Megan Schwab, Savannah Davis
What quote was the strongest in your opinion?
"[Christmas] is the only time that I get to see all of my relatives at once and it always brings us closer together as a family."
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading?
No.
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement?
A quote.

Sports
Rowing team shares their boating experience

Even though it's not a school-based sport, the Bowie rowing team is a very close-knit community. The members say it's both a good way to stay in shape and get exercise as well as to meet new people and spend time with friends.

Who was quoted in the story?
Mary Geisinger, Ben Bell, Ben Patterson
What quote was the strongest in your opinion?
"It is an exhilarating sport full of competition and chances to become a part of a larger community."
Did the lead sentence make you want to keep reading?
No. 
Was the conclusion a quote or a statement?
A statement.

Ideas for other stories:
  • The school musical, Evita
  • The Bowie Gay Straight Alliance doing a clothes drive for transgender kids (I think it's happening again this month)
  • Juniors who are trying to become next year's senior directors in the theatre company

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